10 Responses

  1. John says:

    Would not watch 30 min. Do want to see the narrator at start and more background to set the stage.

  2. Anonymous says:

    It’s a beautiful story! Might be good to give the name of the tribe for the source if it’s known.

  3. paul says:

    Thanks. I wrote it, so maybe the Tribe of Israel 😉

  4. cicada says:

    There you go!

  5. Jacqui says:

    Jacqui Bostrom
    I loved it, very well done. It kept my interest and the images were wonderful. As I caveat I must add that I am an avid collector or native art, have a house full so the subject is of particular interest. I have to ponder what I think about animation, maybe but I loved the images. I also read some of your blog which I had been told was very interesting and it was!! Best, Jacqui Bostrom
    20 hours ago•0

    • Paul says:

      Thank you Jacqui for your input. Please feel free to add comments to any and all stories that interest you. Critical
      Is good! I know folks are reading the blog, but I get very little feedback which I need to improve.

  6. Marilyn Scott says:

    Nice storyline, great photos. Assume children are your target audience? Suggest you slow down the narration.

  7. Hi Marilyn. Thank you so much for the feedback. A number of people have told me to slow down the narration. I will do that. No, this is not really a children’s story. It is a fable and hence a bit childlike in its telling, but it is meant to speak to adults. It is actually the prologue to the larger story whose link is above (and here) http://torsorotation.com/2014/09/phall/

    Thanks again! Paul

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